Forgotten Realms Movie

Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Fri Jan 19, 2007 2:37 am

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NESchampion · Post by **NESchampion** » Fri Jan 19, 2007 9:01 pm

Now it gets good. Maybe add some conversation before hopping to the drow entering Olias' home though, as it seemed a really direct route, and the passing of time seemed brief.

Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Fri Jan 19, 2007 10:09 pm

A cardinal rule in screenwriting is, enter a scene as late as possible and get out of it as early as possible. So, showing them sitting around holding a conversation would only unecessarily prolong the scene. Lots and lots of dialogue can murder a scene. Sometimes characters can say a lot w/o actually speaking. If you go back and read some of the scenes where's there's dialogue, you'll see that a lot of them start as if the characters had been talking before we see them. If it doesn't serve to move the story forward, or convey something important to the reader/viewer/audience, it shouldn't be written.

In a novel, what you suggest would work just fine. Unfortunately, screenwriting is a different animal altogether. As a matter of fact, come subsequent revisions, there's gonna be a lot of the current dialogue and narrative cut, as well as some added. I hope this makes sense. But keep the suggestions and critique comin'. And thanks to those who've PM'd me your critiques and suggestions as well. There's a lotta work left to do yet.

NESchampion · Post by **NESchampion** » Fri Jan 19, 2007 11:20 pm

Inaubryn wrote:A cardinal rule in screenwriting is, enter a scene as late as possible and get out of it as early as possible. So, showing them sitting around holding a conversation would only unecessarily prolong the scene. Lots and lots of dialogue can murder a scene. Sometimes characters can say a lot w/o actually speaking. If you go back and read some of the scenes where's there's dialogue, you'll see that a lot of them start as if the characters had been talking before we see them. If it doesn't serve to move the story forward, or convey something important to the reader/viewer/audience, it shouldn't be written.

In a novel, what you suggest would work just fine. Unfortunately, screenwriting is a different animal altogether. As a matter of fact, come subsequent revisions, there's gonna be a lot of the current dialogue and narrative cut, as well as some added. I hope this makes sense. But keep the suggestions and critique comin'. And thanks to those who've PM'd me your critiques and suggestions as well. There's a lotta work left to do yet.

I see your point; looking forward to more.

Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Sat Jan 20, 2007 6:13 pm

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Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Wed Jan 24, 2007 6:24 pm

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Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Thu Feb 08, 2007 7:47 am

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White Warlock · Post by **White Warlock** » Thu Feb 08, 2007 8:56 am

Actually, i appreciate the education i'm getting. i took a scriptwriting course before, but was sadly unimpressed by the teaching. This, on the other hand, provides not only examples, but critique and counter-critique.

Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Sun Feb 11, 2007 10:05 pm

Good to hear. Of course, do take into account that this isn't correct screenplay format. I'm sure you know that already though.

Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Sun Feb 11, 2007 10:28 pm

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White Warlock · Post by **White Warlock** » Sun Feb 11, 2007 11:03 pm

Inaubryn wrote:Good to hear. Of course, do take into account that this isn't correct screenplay format. I'm sure you know that already though.

aye, wasn't stressing format.

Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Mon Feb 12, 2007 7:51 am

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Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Sun Apr 01, 2007 7:16 pm

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Inaubryn · Post by **Inaubryn** » Thu Apr 05, 2007 6:45 am

Added a scene at the top of the last post.