I need your help writing an email

[zicada]

... to send to roughly 4300 of our former members.

I think this could potentially help us get some new blood.

English is not my first language, so I was hoping one of you would step up and help with this.

Basically it would include a few words on switching to a new site, what we're currently up to, and that we would love it for them to come back and check things out. Some sales skills wouldn't hurt

It's important to think this one through a bit though, so I was thinking once we have something fleshed out, I could post it somewhere and we could have a collective look at it before I start figuring out how to do this from a technical aspect.

Also, before it's sent, I will change the applications system to include a 'returning member' option.

What do you guys think ?

[Rusty]

Dear Friend,

As you read this, I don't want you to feel sorry for me, because, I believe everyone will die someday.
My name is MR THOMAS WIRUM, a Crude Oil merchant in Norway,i have been diagnosed with Esophageal cancer .
It has defied all forms of medical treatment, and right now I have only about a few months to live, according to medical experts.

I have not particularly lived my life so well, as I never really cared for anyone(not even myself)but my business. Though I am very rich, I was never generous, I was always hostile to people and only focused on my business as that was the only thing I cared for. But now I regret all this as I now know that there is more to life than just! wanting to have or make all the money in the world.

I believe when God gives me a second chance to come to this world I would live my life a different way from how I have lived it. Now that God has called me, I have willed and given most of my property and assets to my immediate and extended family members as well as a few close friends. I want God to be merciful to me and accept my soul so, I have decided to give alms to charity organizations, as I want this to be one of the last good deeds I do on earth. So far, I have distributed money to some charity organizations in Austra, cameroun, liberia,Algeria and Malaysia. Now that my health has deteriorated so badly, I cannot do this myself anymore. I once asked members of my family to close one of my accounts and distribute the money which I have there to charity organization in Bulgaria and Pakistan, they refused and kept the money to themselves. Hence! , I do not trust them anymore, as they seem not to be contended wi th what I have left for them.

The last of my money which no one knows of is the huge cash deposit of Eight million dollars $8,000,000,00 that I have with a finance/Security Company abroad. I will want you to help me collect this deposit and dispatched it to charity organizations.

I have set aside 10% for you and for your time.

God be with you.

MR THOMAS WIRUM

P.S Check out ALFA.

[zicada]

Yea yea, i get it, haha, funny.

You honestly think one email after years is SPAM ?

[Rick7475]

It's a good idea. Push the NWN2 angle with the TSM server and potential Baldur's gate et al. Remind them that NWN1 is still going in case they have old PC's in the vault.

[zicada]

It's a good idea. Push the NWN2 angle with the TSM server and potential Baldur's gate et al. Remind them that NWN1 is still going in case they have old PC's in the vault.

Yeah, forgot to mention that. I think we should wait until BG2 is live. Ayergo says it should be any minute now. So really pri 1 right now is fleshing out and implementing a portalling system of some kind. Still would like to start looking into this now, and getting a nice mail ready.

[Dorn]

Hi all,

You may or may not remember me from that game A Land Far Away (ALFA).

You may also be suprised that we're still going strong. 100+ CONSISTENT members on NWN1 and NWN2 and still enjoying FREE persistent games run by DMs and wth other players with the same good RPing.There are lots of new faces around and old from around the world.

Anyway i'm just writing to invite you back!

NWN2 has brought a huge improvement to the game and the servers are beautiful. But if you've still got NWN1, dust it off!

Don't worry about the whole application thing...
(this is where you say, BRIEFLY 2 sentences?, how it's been made easy and that if some of you quit becasue it was too hard to get in this is how it's easier - without something genuine here it may not work).

So i hope you're still well and enjoying yourself with whatever you're up to, and if you feel like dropping buy, check us out here [insert link to website/forum page SPECIFICALLY DESIGNED for returning members to show how much better we are in many ways...notjust game/screenies... in more detail and capture there interest) and then feel free to get in touch.

It'd be great to see you back and to see if you still enjoy things like the old times, or even see how things have changed for the better.

Zic

[Brokenbone]

Good effort from Dorn! GL with the "reminder email" campaign...

[NickD]

You honestly think one email after years is SPAM ?

Wasn't an email sent out just prior to going live?

Not spam either way.

[Nalo Jade]

The e-mail's wording is pretty important, but just as important would be the title...

What kind of title would get a person to open that e-mail?

Welcome back we have your cat hostage!

Great news! We have permanently banned Nalo Jade from posting!

Strange news! We have discovered that Fionn is not in disguise but actually part of a cloning program!

Mikayla has finished the ALFA WARS saga, its a best seller, get a free copy!

We no longer request donations! Instead, Zicada has offered to buy you a PC to run NWN2!

ALFA has endorsed Obama!

ALFA has endorsed McCain!

ALFA is now known as a "group of people that know where you live and they demand you play" GoPtKwYlAtDyP for short.

If you don't read this E-mail we will slap you with trout!

TL;DR

...Or more serious ones if that's your thing....

Greetings from A Land Far Away!

NWN1 & NWN2 Global Events scheduled to occur soon.

Calling all retired players for Global ALFA Event!

ALFA wants you to return!


(Things to consider including in e-mail)

New Haks - simplified way of getting set-up (that's all you Zic )
(explanation of what cool things are included... like the awesome new tilesets for NWN1 that we don't have.)

New Games - List of open DM slots, Campaigns & Player groups looking for players.

New Moderation policy - Explanation of how much calmer/friendly the community is.

New rules - Include any changes to rules that make the community seem more fun... races, RP spells, classes, systems ... ect..

New DM positions - List of HDMs seeking DMs for their servers. (in case we someone was more interested in DMing.)

Builder? - List of Servers that are still available for building, and ones that are accepting builders to help out current projects.

Over all imo you need to portray ALFA as something new...with some friendly old faces...

People aren't here because they "forgot" about us... on the contrary they "remember" and choose to stay away, so make them wonder if something major has actually changed...BUT.

Lets make damn sure things have changed, because we only get once chance to make a good second impression.

The rules changing thread was the GREATEST civil / heated discussion I have seen in years. Imagine if that topic had been raised a few years ago. Really good job everybody keeping their "head"...that was pretty cool. I was impressed, really.

[NickD]

Let's not get Nalo to write the email.

[Nalo Jade]

Actually no worries there. I didn't volunteer to write it... and ...

No one is the "boss of me" so you can't "get me to write it."

[Rick7475]

Don't worry, Nalo, you can always write for microsoft ...

[Burt]

Dear Jagoff,

Why did you leave ALFA you miserable bastard? Come back now or there will be consequences.

Sincerely,
a Jagoff.